Tuesday, January 27, 2009

Tic Toc


rushes through
the bones
of my fingers

blasting flesh
with
relentless rage

i, fever-set
try to contain
save/savour/saviour

one moment
comes and stays
still

Inspired by one single impression - If Only I Had Time
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9 comments:

  1. AnonymousJanuary 28, 2009 at 10:13 AM

    i like this save savour saviour. wow, you have written a lot this month. will have to check it all out.. this feels urgent.. kind of fight or flight maybe. that's how i see it..

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  2. AnonymousJanuary 28, 2009 at 1:00 PM

    I love the juxtaposition of the urgency of movement and the sudden stop. The multiplicity of "still" and the singularity of one moment... just the one, still....

    slamming.

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  3. Amias (ljm and liquidplastic)January 29, 2009 at 12:38 AM

    I came, I read, I understood. And still time keeps ticking away.

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  4. MaggieJanuary 29, 2009 at 1:18 AM

    Sometimes...time is not our friend.
    This is a very thoughtful piece of work and it makes me see the face down person on the beach with different eyes as time bears down on us all at times.

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  5. PearlJanuary 29, 2009 at 8:27 AM

    nice, especially the ticktoc in the bones and the sound and sense of high passion of the last 2 stanzas.

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  6. Tumblewords:January 29, 2009 at 2:04 PM

    Love the movement and rhythm in this piece and even more than that, the sense of a captured instant.

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  7. Kilauea PoetryJanuary 30, 2009 at 6:44 AM

    "One moment comes & stays still...
    tic toc" nice.
    Taking charge, taking time..before it slips away-

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  8. AnonymousJanuary 30, 2009 at 2:55 PM

    Your poem captures and clutches me for that moment in time.
    Read this several times and admired it.

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